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I'm not a debutant's faux pas

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Woman's silhouette I trace

'neath hat, in one-piece dress

With hand around my lovely waist

My hairless head caress

Then uncouth belch defiles the air

My blood thereby is spilt

Wind cries not my name so fair

As howls protest a tilt

Edit: changed And to As in the final line

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Was one of those Mrs. Buttersworth syrup bottles (shaped like Mrs. Buttersworth...).



Probably not right, but just getting things started. Not sure how well it really fits the last couple lines, but the first lines work pretty well

Woman's silhouette (looks like a woman)
'neath hat, in one-piece dress (wearing a dress, with the "lid" being the "hat")

With hand around my lovely waist (her hands are clasped in front of her at the waist)

My hairless head caress (you twist the cap on top...and obviously there is no actual hair on the bottle)

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My blood thereby is spilt (pouring the syrup)

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I like that.

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Close, but not quite on the mark. And as you said, largely because some of the later lines describe things that that answer doesn't do.

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"Jean Paul Gaultier" Perfume...or "Landy" Cognac...almost the same descriptions as my syrup bottle, but satisfy at least one (maybe more) of the other lines...??

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I've never heard of that one before (so obviously not exactly what I had in mind), but after googling I see that the second of those fits all the clues equally well.

What I had in mind was a bottle of soda (single-serving size).


Woman's silhouette I trace - they're often hourglass shaped
'neath hat, in one-piece dress - cap and label
With hand around my lovely waist
My hairless head caress
- process of opening the bottle
Then uncouth belch defiles the air - hiss of carbonation
My blood thereby is spilt
Wind cries not my name so fair
As howls protest a tilt
- blowing across the top of an empty bottle at the right angle

An uncouth belch could equally apply to the smell of alcohol when the bottle's opened, or a flat out literal belch after throwing down a few.

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